First Page Feedback – Finding Finnegan

This was sent in for Escape, our Australian digital publication! Thanks, Amanda Knight who is @AKnightWriter on Twitter…   He didn’t spit out the sandy dirt caking his teeth or lift his head from its half buried state. He didn’t fixate on the fact that he couldn’t feel his left leg, or that the searing heat in his…

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First Page Feedback – Love Taxis

Although aimed at Harlequin Intrigue, we’re not quite sure it has the right tone. But Marie Laval did create a vivid opening! ‘I’m Pelveden. I believe you’re waiting for me.’ Startled by the deep male voice behind her, Rosalie spun round to face a dark blue coat open onto a blue pin stripe suit, crisp…

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First Page Feedback – Warrior’s Surrender

An exciting Historical entry from Elizabeth Ellen Carter! She’s @EECarterAuthor on Twitter… 1070 Durham England The flare of a pitch-soaked torch lit the corner of the timber long-house. Lying on the floor, its yellow-orange flame licked greedily at the timber, igniting it. Roiling black smoke billowed up, filling the room and obscuring the entrance to the hall.…

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First Page Feedback – Dark Justice

Here’s a potential dystopian, potential  futuristic story from Shelley Russell Nolan.  1 Jackson opened his eyes a fraction to study the two guards stationed outside his cell. All  the lights in the cell block were dimmed but he could see them clearly. They were both watching him, their enhanced vision almost as good as his in this…

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First Page Feedback – Smouldering Embers

Jackie Burrows sent in a Presents submission for today’s First Page Feedback!   He was late. He was never late. Harrison J Bentley was a stickler for punctuality according to the senior executives who awaited the arrival of their CEO. They were anxious for the board meeting to start, but none of them could possibly have been…

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Harlequin Editor Carly Silver Goes Over the Finishing Touches to a Book

Sometimes a year goes by slowly–and sometimes very fast! Amy Woods, debut author for Harlequin Special Edition and Carly Silver, new editorial assistant for Harlequin Special Edition, both have something to celebrate in September–the publication of Amy’s debut title! After discussing the manuscript and behind the scenes bits, here’s how the final touches are done……

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First Page Feedback – In A Pirate’s Debt

Here’s another piece of feedback for a Love Inspired  Historical. In a Pirate’s Debt is by Elva Cobb Martin! (@elvacobbmartin) Jamaica, 1720 Marry Sir Roger Poole? Never. Travay Allston rushed into her bedroom, eased the door shut, and fell against it. She pressed her fingers against her rib cage, trying to free the painful breaths trapped inside.…

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First Page Feedback – Turn to Me

Here’s a Kiss/Presents entry from NLH–it’s definitely catchy! 🙂 Katherine Holt hated these things. After a performance, all she wanted to do was go home, soak in her tub and read her new book. But this was all part of what she did, the public face of the famous and well-respected ballet company she danced…

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First Page Feedback – Aquila

We’re going to have the occasional two posts a day as I’ve gotten some good responses from editors! Here’s a paranormal/YA title from SEDP… There are still times when I want to curl up into a ball and die. When everything that’s happened hits me again and I want to stop breathing and let it all…

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First Page Feedback – House of Tears

Here’s a suitably atmospheric Shivers entry from @MaggiAndersen! England, 1920 The wind built to a crescendo, and with a moan, whipped Amanda Sherringham’s hair into her face. She filled her lungs with pine-scented air she loved a storm. In the distance, lightning lit up the purple-tinged clouds. Such weather seemed fitting in the circumstances, considering how dramatic the…

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