First Page Feedback – Secrets in the Stacks

JMH sent this in for Romantic Suspense. We do love librarian heroines–and maybe a hero, too? Or someone else? Chapter One “Ok Y chromosomes, where are you? Come to momma,” Delia said as she adjusted the corset, forcing her chest up to her chin. “That looks terribly uncomfortable,” her colleague, and best friend, Jane said,…

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First Page Feedback – A Measure of Money

Another Special Edition entry! Luckily readers also love these stories… Jenny stowed her bag in the overhead locker of the plane and squeezed herself into her window seat. Flying on budget airlines was the only time she was glad to be shorter than average. She tucked a wayward tendril of her short chestnut bob back behind her…

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First Page Feedback – Potential Wife

One of our first Harlequin Romance entries I believe! Troy Charles slumped in his chair with one long leg draped over the padded arm, the other thrust out in front. “If you want me to marry, you find me a wife.” “I might just have to do that.” His father looked up from the Sunday newspaper.…

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First Page Feedback – Finding Finnegan

This was sent in for Escape, our Australian digital publication! Thanks, Amanda Knight who is @AKnightWriter on Twitter…   He didn’t spit out the sandy dirt caking his teeth or lift his head from its half buried state. He didn’t fixate on the fact that he couldn’t feel his left leg, or that the searing heat in his…

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First Page Feedback – Love Taxis

Although aimed at Harlequin Intrigue, we’re not quite sure it has the right tone. But Marie Laval did create a vivid opening! ‘I’m Pelveden. I believe you’re waiting for me.’ Startled by the deep male voice behind her, Rosalie spun round to face a dark blue coat open onto a blue pin stripe suit, crisp…

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First Page Feedback – Warrior’s Surrender

An exciting Historical entry from Elizabeth Ellen Carter! She’s @EECarterAuthor on Twitter… 1070 Durham England The flare of a pitch-soaked torch lit the corner of the timber long-house. Lying on the floor, its yellow-orange flame licked greedily at the timber, igniting it. Roiling black smoke billowed up, filling the room and obscuring the entrance to the hall.…

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First Page Feedback – Dark Justice

Here’s a potential dystopian, potential  futuristic story from Shelley Russell Nolan.  1 Jackson opened his eyes a fraction to study the two guards stationed outside his cell. All  the lights in the cell block were dimmed but he could see them clearly. They were both watching him, their enhanced vision almost as good as his in this…

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First Page Feedback – Smouldering Embers

Jackie Burrows sent in a Presents submission for today’s First Page Feedback!   He was late. He was never late. Harrison J Bentley was a stickler for punctuality according to the senior executives who awaited the arrival of their CEO. They were anxious for the board meeting to start, but none of them could possibly have been…

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Harlequin Editor Carly Silver Goes Over the Finishing Touches to a Book

Sometimes a year goes by slowly–and sometimes very fast! Amy Woods, debut author for Harlequin Special Edition and Carly Silver, new editorial assistant for Harlequin Special Edition, both have something to celebrate in September–the publication of Amy’s debut title! After discussing the manuscript and behind the scenes bits, here’s how the final touches are done……

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First Page Feedback – In A Pirate’s Debt

Here’s another piece of feedback for a Love Inspired  Historical. In a Pirate’s Debt is by Elva Cobb Martin! (@elvacobbmartin) Jamaica, 1720 Marry Sir Roger Poole? Never. Travay Allston rushed into her bedroom, eased the door shut, and fell against it. She pressed her fingers against her rib cage, trying to free the painful breaths trapped inside.…

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