First Page Feedback – Turn to Me

Here’s a Kiss/Presents entry from NLH–it’s definitely catchy! 🙂 Katherine Holt hated these things. After a performance, all she wanted to do was go home, soak in her tub and read her new book. But this was all part of what she did, the public face of the famous and well-respected ballet company she danced…

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First Page Feedback – Aquila

We’re going to have the occasional two posts a day as I’ve gotten some good responses from editors! Here’s a paranormal/YA title from SEDP… There are still times when I want to curl up into a ball and die. When everything that’s happened hits me again and I want to stop breathing and let it all…

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First Page Feedback – House of Tears

Here’s a suitably atmospheric Shivers entry from @MaggiAndersen! England, 1920 The wind built to a crescendo, and with a moan, whipped Amanda Sherringham’s hair into her face. She filled her lungs with pine-scented air she loved a storm. In the distance, lightning lit up the purple-tinged clouds. Such weather seemed fitting in the circumstances, considering how dramatic the…

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First Page Feedback – Murder Most Unusual

Ooh, a great title and compelling opening! 🙂 Thanks, Michelle Somers (@msomerswriter), for an exciting start to the day! They make it look so easy in books. Murder the victim, move the body. Stacey Holland adjusted her grip. Puffing the hair from her eyes, she squinted through the vast darkness. She could have been curled up…

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First Page Feedback – Leaving Louisiana

Alison sent this in without a genre chosen–it’s a moody, intriguing opening for sure. Either YA or New Adult perhaps…. Or maybe this is more of a prologue? Interesting in any case! JAMIE It saddens me to think this is the last time I will ever sit on these swings. I will never have Jared…

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First Page Feedback – Aflame

This if for Harlequin E Historical Romance. SJ Cameron opens the story with definite action!  A moan. He paused on his way back to the box for a moment wondering if someone was hurt. There it was again, a tone he knew so well, followed by a whispered, “my love”. The wide theatre corridors were empty of…

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First Page Feedback – Animal Instincts

Here’s a Superromance submission. Lauren James knows pets are always appealing!  Straddling a sexy hunk of a man on the freshly mown grass of her local park should be a dream come true for Charlie Morgan. Instead, she wavered between pissed off and turned on. But that’s the thing about dreams, reality never meets expectation. In her…

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First Page Feedback – Trust

Oh, we do love some space opera stories! Here’s an intriguing one by Maya Aodhan (@aesa_K) that is definitely out of this world!  “This is the Monte Cristo, requesting docking permission,” the pilot spoke into the ship’s comm. “Acknowledged, Monte Cristo. You are clear for docking bay B16.” “Should be parked in moments, Captain.” Rafe Ibán’s…

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First Page Feedback – Ink Slapped

Another HQN first page! @Authoramjones (A.M. Jones) has sent in a page with a very intriguing title….    It’s only the first day of searching, and I find him. Shock courses through me as I pause in the door. My character has unique coloring and a large build with shoulderswept, chestnut hair. It feels like my brain…

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Addison Fox on archetypal characters

  Addison Fox had written nearly fifteen titles before coming to Harlequin Romantic Suspense with her Steele family series! As a writer she’s fascinated by the archetypal characters–why readers respond to them, and what you can do to make them your own.    What’s So Appealing About Certain Characters? Whether we call them hooks or stereotypes,…

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