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First Page Feedback – The Keys of the Music Box Witch

Ooh, time travel can be great–and oh, so tricky… @ARCook_writes has a wonderful imagination… Chapter One: Gunslinger The last one is waking up now. She groans as she sits up on the unfamiliar ground. Her eyes must be burning—she squeezes her eyelids together tightly and grimaces. Sensitive areas on the body tend to experience a…

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First Page Feedback – Desperate

First person is unusual in our series titles, but has worked. However, it doesn’t let the reader get insight into the other characters in the same way. Here’s K. Evers’s Romantic Suspense story…    Will this night ever end? I continue to fight the overwhelming urge to toss and turn, and deliberately attempt to regulate…

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First Page Feedback – Without a Doubt

Sandra P has a Harlequin Special Edition opening! If Mason Gray were to summon up a favorite female fantasy his ex-girlfriend Tara Michaels would rank up there with Angelina Jolie or Cindy Crawford. For bonus points he could even remember how Tara had felt wrapped around him as she sighed his name. Although considering she…

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First Page Feedback – Flying Doctor’s Revenge

And another Medical! Charlotte balances the emotion and drama in an appealing way. Dr Ethan … tossed the newspaper in the bin with the force of a baseball bat. Damn that family. Blazoned all over the front page, smiling like heroes but he knew the cold hard truth about them. If he ever had to…

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First Page Feedback – Somerset Cove

And we’re back to doing our own First Page Feedbacks after an exciting week of SO YOU THINK YOU CAN WRITE’s online conference! Karen C has sent in an opening for HQN… “Okay, so I understand the fondant is on backorder for two weeks, but you DO realize that this is a bakery, right?” Jenna…

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First Page Feedback – Soul Tender

Sophia has sent in a Historical opening set in the 1920s–very intriguing!  Chicago-1926 Thyra Edward’s paused outside of the Pullman companies Chicago headquarters to straighten her suit, a heavily starched navy Pullman jacket and knee-length skirt. Company attire. Worn deliberately and, depending on the outcome of this summons by her employer, in defiance more so than out of…

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First Page Feedback – Heart Talk

Another Medical title! T.D. Jones (@TDJones5) has creating a great story! “I won’t work with him again!” Samantha Summers insisted as she took a seat in front of the large desk. She sucked in a deep breath and slowly let it out. The news announced to her caught her off guard. She never expected to hear that…

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First Page Feedback – Green Coat, Black Gloves, Red Handbag

A fascinating title–or shopping list?  Terry Barca (@terrybarca1) has some great visual images to capture readers in this romantic suspense story… It’s the middle of Winter and there’s a gun in my handbag. Actually there is a lot of stuff in there but mostly it’s the usual things that a woman carries, until you get to…

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First Page Feedback – Sweet Justice

Here is a Nocturne opening from Elle Clouse! (@ElleClouse) Not much paranormal, but there is something intriguing going on…. The shockwave rocked the fifth floor of the ChemPharm Industrial Company building. The lights flickered. Dust fell from the ceiling tiles as they shook in their rafters. She stood from her desk chair to look across the call…

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First Page Feedback – The Paramedic’s Precious Bundle

Our Harlequin/M&B Medical Romances are popular all around the world. With high-stakes emotion and action, it’s easy to see why! Here’s a submission from @abbey_Macinnis1  “Where’s she off too?” Jeremy watched with concern as a young woman ran across the road, straight into the path of the ambulance. From her place behind the wheel, Debbie…

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