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First Page Feedback – Pentakagon

There’s something mysterious straight from the title! And we know plenty of people who love their coffee in the office… “Maybe this wasn’t such a bright idea,” Rosie thought, shivering as she built a fire in the rusty woodstove, her sole source of heat and cooking. The Girl Scout skills were still working, the wood…

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First Page Feedback – It’s a Love Thing

More Special Edition entries! @LeeKilraine has some good ideas in her opening… It was the binky’s fault. If Gabriella had been a thumb-sucker Arden would be free and clear by now, instead of facing down her worst nightmare. No. Correction. It was only her second worst nightmare. Her worst nightmare stood over six feet tall…

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First Page Feedback – Dark Souls

A few Nocturnes came in as well! This evocative opening is from @ImogeneNix…   The burning at the back of her neck warned her that she was being watched. A quick glance didn’t clarify it for her. Instead she turned around in time to see her mother’s face pale. “Mama?” She took a step forward…

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First Page Feedback – The Viking’s Promise

The number of Historical entries is making our editors happy! Here’s Charlotte’s opening… “There’s nothing else to be done.” The healer stepped out of Alf’s room into the main living quarters, her head bowed respectfully. Frea’s heart leapt into her mouth and her hands tightened on the wool she was spinning. What do you mean? she wanted…

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First Page Feedback – Untaming Delilah

Ooh, a Nocturne! Thanks Ashlynn! (@Ashlynn_Monroe), for sharing… “Hey there Delilah, what’s it like in New York City…” sang Jonathan Brook, her guardian’s lab assistant. “I swear if you actually said hello like a normal person I’d think you were body snatched by aliens,” Delilah Jones interrupted his serenade. The song was his usual greeting. His…

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Inside a Harlequin Copy Editor’s Life!

Authors–and editors–have frequently mentioned the blessing of a good copy editor to make sure those last participles are undangled and infinitives unsplit (or at least pointed out in case we really meant to do that!). Shona Sequeira is an experienced Harlequin copy editor, and she knows her Chicago and her Webster’s without a doubt! We’ve invited her to…

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First Page Feedback – Secrets in the Stacks

JMH sent this in for Romantic Suspense. We do love librarian heroines–and maybe a hero, too? Or someone else? Chapter One “Ok Y chromosomes, where are you? Come to momma,” Delia said as she adjusted the corset, forcing her chest up to her chin. “That looks terribly uncomfortable,” her colleague, and best friend, Jane said,…

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First Page Feedback – A Measure of Money

Another Special Edition entry! Luckily readers also love these stories… Jenny stowed her bag in the overhead locker of the plane and squeezed herself into her window seat. Flying on budget airlines was the only time she was glad to be shorter than average. She tucked a wayward tendril of her short chestnut bob back behind her…

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First Page Feedback – Potential Wife

One of our first Harlequin Romance entries I believe! Troy Charles slumped in his chair with one long leg draped over the padded arm, the other thrust out in front. “If you want me to marry, you find me a wife.” “I might just have to do that.” His father looked up from the Sunday newspaper.…

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First Page Feedback – Finding Finnegan

This was sent in for Escape, our Australian digital publication! Thanks, Amanda Knight who is @AKnightWriter on Twitter…   He didn’t spit out the sandy dirt caking his teeth or lift his head from its half buried state. He didn’t fixate on the fact that he couldn’t feel his left leg, or that the searing heat in his…

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